I am kick, kick, kicking myself. Ouch. I made a HUGE blunder on the three sentence pitch contest that I entered on Monday on QueryTracker. As always, I realized it at the worst possible time; like in the middle of the night. I’ll post it here. Tell me what is wrong with this picture. I’ll tell you below, but if you find something besides the one I saw, tell me so I can agonize about that too.
Hiding in the Spotlight is a fish-out-of-water humor adult fiction novel about the misadventures of Oklahoma transplants to California during the 1960s and 70s.
Whether it’s the seediest areas of L.A. or exclusive hamlets for the rich and famous, it’s a comedy of horrors for youngest family member, Patty Austen, who, on top of being hearing impaired, must deal with her family’s humiliating backwoods antics.
The frequent moves compound even bigger challenges for Patty and her desire for belonging, but also bring her relief to leave behind the aftermath of yet another failed assimilation attempt by her family.
If you want to irritate an agent, this is how: use the words fiction and novel next to each other. They mean the same so why say both? Originally it said coming-of-age novel. Then at the last minute I replaced coming-of-age with adult fiction to be in compliance with her requirements. It is both, but since she didn’t have the coming-of-age on her list I changed it.
Please tell me if you see something else, since I had no critiques of it prior to sending.
You know what this means folks? I’ll be posting another rant about losing another contest. Just kidding. I won’t rant. This time I’ll accept my defeat with my head down.